ELITE FOUR, specter silvance

[spectersilvance]

Specter Vincent Silvance
_{"All around are familiar faces , Worn out places,
worn out faces, Bright and early for the daily races
Going nowhere, going nowhere... "}

NAME:: Specter Vincent Silvance
AGE:: twenty-one
GENDER:: Male
CLASS:: Elite Four
BIRTH SEASON:: Winter
ORIENTATION:: Heterosexual

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CLAIM::
[b]PANDORA HEART[/b] -- [b]Break[/b] -- Specter Silvance

OOC NAME:: Tokusentai
EXPERIENCE:: 4 years
HOW DID YOU FIND US?:: Advertisement

[LATIAS & LATIOS]

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Okay first off before I do anything else. I have a few things I should point out about this app.

• First off.. we are and advanced/literate forum. Meaning we do expect your app to have good grammar. Reading through most of this I got lost at what you were trying to say mostly through the history. There are a lot of sentences, that aren't sentences and a few run-ons I believe.
  
  
• To me other than the grammar issues, this character is a bit godmod ish. You didn't mention how old he was when he ran away. Judging from the way you put it, he was fairly young. So.. how does someone that old get away and live out in a forest? I understand someone older maybe.. but that was a little unrealistic.
  
  
• You never mention your soulmate throughout this profile at all. They were born with you, meaning they go through everything you do. You should of at least mentioned it. It would of been allowed if you hadn't been applying for a canon, but canon's soulmates are all ready chosen, meaning it should of been in your history at least once...
  
  
• Also.. even if the person did get away from their families.. challenging the league, beating gym leaders. That brings news. It wouldn't be like he was just hiding out.. especially if he beat the champion like you said he did. So.. i don't know how they haven't found him yet.
  
  
• All in all, Its my humble opinion that you not take a canon. I would be willing to work with you to make a normal character, but with this profile, I just can't see you playing a canon.
  
  If you have any questions please don't hesitate to pm me or arceus, thank you.

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